It's my first challenge, and for those of you who aren't aware of the rules, I've listed them below!
Write a short story/flash fiction story in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, including a poem. Begin the story with the words, “Shadows crept across the wall”. These five words will be included in the word count.
If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional), do one or more of these:
- end the story with the words: "everything faded." (also included in the word count)
- include the word "orange" in the story
- write in the same genre you normally write
- make your story 200 words exactly!
I actually managed to have included all the criteria, including the word count, so I'm super proud and amazed with myself. So without further ado, here is mine. I hope you like it!
The First Kiss
Shadows crept across the wall, as the hazy blue glow from the TV flickered across our faces. I looked down at his hands, perfect and strong, his fingertips stained orange from the bowl of shared cheetos. I resisted the urge to lick the powdery goodness from my own. Instead I wanted to imprint my mark upon his smooth, tanned skin.
He smiled, a slow curling smile that reached out its furling tentacles and wrapped me in his warmth. My heart fluttered helplessly against its prison of bones, and I knew with a growing certainty that I was about to be kissed.
Delicious shivers danced upon my skin, as that perfect hand slipped behind the base of my neck, its nimble fingers digging and tangling into the wild mass of my hair. Tender, rough, silky lips teased and devoured me. I inhaled him, his taste dancing seductively through my veins, consuming me.
Clinging to him, my fingers sunk into his compliant body. I wanted to disappear into that body, to intermingle with his flesh, his sinew, to feel our hearts beat as one. Gasping I pulled away, shyly smiling over my heaving hormones. His lips claimed mine again, and everything faded.
Whew! This would have done well in last week's "Is It Getting Hot In Here?" blogfest ;-)
ReplyDeleteOoh very romantic!! LOVED it!! And I agree! Even though I didn't participate in the "Is It Getting Hot In Here?" blogfest, this totally would have worked! Great job! Voting for you :)
ReplyDeleteI'm entry #19
Well written piece. I like it. Good luck with the contest.
ReplyDeleteAwesome job! I love a good kiss story!
ReplyDeleteVery much enjoyed :) I liked your descriptions and the sensual tone throughout. Well done!
ReplyDeleteVery sexy! I loved it, and the Cheetos where a nice touch :)
ReplyDeleteYou would have been amazing in the "Is It Getting Hot In Here" blogfest. And your writing is amazing here, too. Nice one! :)
ReplyDeleteVery nice! and hot! And I love how you incorporated the word orange here. Good Job!
ReplyDeleteWell written! I really liked it! Very romantic :)
ReplyDeleteI'm #37
180 degrees from mine. Very romantic! Even included "orange" in it. Echoes of the HOT KISS blogfest! Roland
ReplyDeleteThanks everyone! As you can see I had kissing on the brain…it's an addiction I know!
ReplyDeleteWell it's hot in here now, that's for sure. Yummy entry, thoroughly enjoyed.
ReplyDeleteWhew. I'm fanning myself! I'm number 112.
ReplyDeleteWhat a hot kiss! Whew! Someone turn on the a/c!!
ReplyDeleteI love a first kiss. Every man should learn to touch a woman's face and head while kissing. So romantic!! First one like this I've read today. I like it!
I'm a new follower and challenge entry #96.
Go Amber! This is steamy! Love it! Great Job!!!!!
ReplyDelete...that's certainly one way to start off my morning. No caffeine needed today!
ReplyDeleteLoved it, Amber ;)
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HOTT! :) Nicely done. Now I want Cheetos...but they will be so disappointing.
ReplyDeleteVery well done! I really liked how she was all "I knew I was gonna be kissed" --that's electricity!
ReplyDeleteOooh, nice and spicy! I love the Cheetos detail.
ReplyDeleteSWOON! And I'll never look at Cheetos the same again. Yum...
ReplyDeleteThanks everyone! It really means a lot to me that you all liked it! I still have a few of your sites to get to, but I promise I will be checking everyones short stories out as well!
ReplyDeleteYowsers! I bet everything faded. LOL! Great job. New follower too.
ReplyDeleteThanks Mina!
DeleteHoly moly! That was some hot stuff! Well done. (New follower here.:)
ReplyDeleteThanks Katie!
DeleteThis was great. I hope you do complete a book and that I find it when you do! Good luck. I know how hard it is to write around a family's schedule. Mine is #71
ReplyDeleteThanks you so much Bridget! I do love writing kissing scenes!
DeleteWell written Amber and well done! (Loved the line about the Cheeto's!) Voting for you! I'm #61.
ReplyDeleteThanks Christy!
DeleteThis was steamy! When I write these scenes they're cheesy, but the only cheesy thing here was the Cheetos. Very nice!
ReplyDeleteThanks! I'm so glad that everyone really liked the Cheetos scene, I was hoping it would set a YA feel.
DeleteI think you just invented liquid Cheetos! HOLY HOT!!
ReplyDeleteBethany - bahaha...liquid Cheetos! Thanks for stopping by!
DeleteAwesome!! I loved that you went a different direction than most. Turned out very nicely!!
ReplyDeleteThanks Traci!
DeleteWow, that's hot. Nicely written. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Jessica!
DeleteDid someone turn up the temperature in my room? That was some kiss! Thanks for sharing, Amber, and for commenting on my story earlier.
ReplyDelete#124
Thanks Cynthia!
DeleteThat was really well written. Steamy. I love the detail with the Cheetos - it puts a ya feel to the scene. Making out on the couch, where every breath is so important. Ah, teenage hormones.
ReplyDeleteGreat entry.
I'm glad that you got a YA feel, because that is the genre I write for. Thanks for stopping by!
DeleteYowza. After reading that, I will never look at a bowl of cheetos the same way. Great job incorporating those little details that really pull us in. Beautifully written, too.
ReplyDeleteIn fact, I loved it so much, I'm shortlisting you for the next round of judging. Congrats and good luck in the next round!
Thanks so much Avery! Yea, I'm in the next round!
DeleteMmmm! Brings back memories from my teen years when I met my husband of almost 33 years. He likes Cheetos, too! (wink, wink!) Glad you made it to the next round! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks for dropping by my blog a while ago. Sorry it's taken so long to get over here. You have my vote, by the way! (Hi! It's Susan from My Withershins. Sometimes Blogspot doesn't let us Wordpress people comment, so I had to use my old persona.)
Thanks for voting Susan…and for stopping by!
DeleteLove your kiss :) Thanks for hopping over to comment on my blog?
ReplyDeleteThanks Lori!
DeleteAloha Amber,
ReplyDeleteI'm a new follower and also a volunteer judge for Rach's First Challenge of the Fourth Campaign... and it is an honor to let you know you have made it through to the SEMI-FINALS :)
Keep an eye on Rach's blog, as I am sure she will be posting updates, and what to expect next.
Congrats, and good luck in this next round :)
*insert giddy girly squeal* I'm in the Semi-Finals!
DeleteThank you so much Mark! *jumps around manically*
That was hot AND beautifully written! You have a vote from me :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Becky!
DeleteLoved it Amber! Enjoyed every sexy word! You have a vote from me!
ReplyDeleteThanks C.M.!
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